literature

Magnitude

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"I don't like your attitude,"
she said.
"I don't like your magnitude."
He fled.

"What the fuck did you just say,"
she cried!?
"I didn't mean it in that way!"
He lied.

She took a picture from the wall,
and tossed.
He tried to catch it, glass and all,
but lost.

"Don't you pull that shit with me,"
she said.
"On that, I think, we both agree."
He bled.
I have no idea why I wrote this... and I'm not sure if I like it or not.
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:star::star::star::star::star: Overall
:star::star::star::star::star: Vision
:star::star::star::star::star: Originality
:star::star::star::star::star: Technique
:star::star::star::star::star: Impact

This poem paints a nice picture of an arguement between two people- presumably husband and wife or boyfriend and girlfriend: although it could be even brother and sister. The rhyming in the poem is cleverly turned and not mundane in any way. The premise is a unique one- in that poems always seek to tell a story or create or evoke an emotion. This does both in an innovative way. Although the poet may not be sure if he/she likes this poem or not- I feel that it succeeds in every way and intent in creating a vision for the reader. Good job!